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Heaviness

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BrittnyLee

The cold wind means there’s more to come. I’ve felt this heaviness coming onto me before.

Heavy like a heartbreak, like a cross to bear.

Mine.

Yours.

I’ve made mistakes before.

This time there’s not a soul to blame. There is only time and the world revolving as we go on, somehow sitting with this.

16 responses to “Heaviness”

  1. Christopher Lindsay Avatar
    Christopher Lindsay

    Great poem. Flows well. I haven’t seen such long lines in a poem before, but it works.

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    1. BrittnyLee Avatar
      BrittnyLee

      Thank you so much. I know the lines are too long. I’m trying to figure the update out with my wordpress app. 🙂 Thank you for stopping by and commenting Christopher!

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  2. Woodsy Avatar
    Woodsy

    Love this.
    Just saying something as it is.
    Quiet…
    Understated…
    yet somehow saying such a massive thing at the same time.

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    1. BrittnyLee Avatar
      BrittnyLee

      Thank you. There’s been this heaviness and it’s still lingering. All we can do is face and fight it. Thanks John!!! Massive hugs!

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  3. PoojaG Avatar
    PoojaG

    So well written! Sometimes there’s no one to blame- we just ened to move on.

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    1. BrittnyLee Avatar
      BrittnyLee

      Exactly. Best way sometimes 🙂

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    2. BrittnyLee Avatar
      BrittnyLee

      Thank you so much Pooja!!

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      1. PoojaG Avatar
        PoojaG

        You’re welcome!

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      2. BrittnyLee Avatar
        BrittnyLee

        🙂 ♡

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  4. Scrunch Foldington Avatar
    Scrunch Foldington

    You’ve put a lot of heartache into a very few words here, the brevity itself speaks of finality and loss. My favourite part is the most minimalist section:

    “Mine.

    Yours.

    I’ve made mistakes before.”

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    1. BrittnyLee Avatar
      BrittnyLee

      Yes. This piece came from somewhere down inside of me. Some part that grieves something, someone, many. Thank you Tom 🙂 I’m really happy you felt the emotion in this. Thank you so much !

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  5. Jaya Avendel Avatar
    Jaya Avendel

    Love this! It is miserable and rainy where I am right now and, maybe because of the dark clouds, I felt the weight of this while knowing somewhere there is still sun.

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    1. BrittnyLee Avatar
      BrittnyLee

      Thank you. You always manage to write such beautiful comments 🙂

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    2. BrittnyLee Avatar
      BrittnyLee

      I hope the sun joins you your way 🙂

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  6. Ananta Sharma Avatar
    Ananta Sharma

    Love your writings…..
    full of art words…
    God bless you…

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    1. BrittnyLee Avatar
      BrittnyLee

      Thank you so much!!! I’m always trying to improve and keep it interesting. Thank you !

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